Something Smells Rotten on King Street

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By Happyboomernurse

Sarah's house on King Street. ***Please note this is a work of fiction and the events depicted in this story did not actually occur in this neighborhood.***
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Sarah's house on King Street. ***Please note this is a work of fiction and the events depicted in this story did not actually occur in this neighborhood.***

Beaufort County was in the middle of a record breaking heat wave and on top of the sweltering temperatures the locals were tense because several women had mysteriously disappeared. Despite the heat, Sarah shivered as she watched the latest news report on her TV: "Investigators now believe that a cult may be involved in the disappearance of the three women. Each was taken during a full moon, just like tonight, which may mean that the women are being forced to participate in some sort of satanic ritual that may involve human sacrifice."

Sarah's stomach felt queasy at the mere thought of such a thing and she changed the channel refusing to listen to the featured expert who was scheduled to discuss facts about cults. The less I hear about this, the better. I've got enough worries just trying to raise the twins by myself.

The dogs barked warning her she had a visitor. She got up and saw that it was Bill, her next door neighbor. From the scowl on his face she knew he was going to complain about her animals, again. She opened the oak door but kept the screen door closed wanting at least the semblance of a barrier between them. The outside air was steamy and fetid and under other circumstances she would have invited Bill in just to avoid breathing the sickening vapors.

"You've got to stop feeding all those stray cats, Sarah, they're stinking up the whole block and are becoming a real nuisance. Lord knows I've tried to be patient and reason with you but the animal situation has gotten totally out of hand. He held up a paper and pointed to a list of names on the bottom of it. "This is signed by everyone on the block except for Mr. Black. It states that we've warned you to stop feeding strays or further action will be taken. If you don't open the screen door I'm leaving the letter in your mailbox."

"Do what you want but I'm telling you that the smell is coming from Mr. Black's shed, not my animals."

"Yeah right, and Kris Kringel isn't Santa Claus," he retorted, stuffing the letter in her box.

She slammed the door closed harder than she meant to. How could she ever have been friends with that brute? He might be a child psychiatrist but she felt he had shockingly little compassion for her situation since John's death. Oh, he'd still been good to the girls, she'd give him that, but his friendly relationship with her had evaporated when she started getting more animals.

Although she never drank alone, she knew she needed something to calm her down and went into the kitchen opened a bottle of holiday wine left over from Christmastime and poured herself a glass of it. She took glass and bottle into the living room and sat on the couch. Brownie, her beloved black lab, followed her and sat at her feet. He rarely left her side since John had been killed by a drunk driver two days after Christmas. Brownie put his paws on her lap and raised his beautiful face giving her a soulful look. She nuzzled his soft neck and kissed his cheek. "Don't know what I'd do without you. You'll always be my favorite pet, you know that don't you?" He licked her face and she could tell by the look in his eyes that he did know.

He also seemed to be the only one who understood that the hole in her heart needed to be filled and he'd never acted jealous of the other animals she started bringing home after John's death. First came two miniature grey hounds so that the girls would each have their own dog to help them through the grieving process. Then, in February, she found half a dozen abandoned kittens huddled together while she was walking Brownie. The kittens were malnourished and in danger of freezing to death so she took them home and nursed them to health. By then, she was so attached to the kittens that trying to find other homes for them had become unthinkable and she kept them as house pets. In early summer she saw a couple of stray cats in the neighborhood and started setting food out for them. Now there were perhaps a dozen feral cats hanging around her yard especially at night. And as the number of cats had grown her relationship with her neighbors, especially Bill, had become more and more strained.

She did have to concede one thing about Bill's current complaint- there was an odor on King St. that had gotten much worse during the heat wave. In fact, she'd thoroughly searched her yard to see if perhaps one of the feral cats had died and was rotting away, but the only thing she'd discovered was that the odor seemed strongest at the far back corner of her yard where her other neighbor, Mr. Black, had a shed that abutted her own yard. She'd tried to tell Bill that's where the odor was coming from, but he brushed her off refusing to believe it and insisting, "It's from the cats. Mr. Black keeps his yard immaculately clean and well tended, it couldn't be coming from his shed."

Sarah had taken that as a snide remark about her own yard which had become unkempt and overgrown. Everything except caring for the children and her animals seemed overwhelming to her since John's death. Even putting the children to bed was a struggle. John used to tuck them in and spin imaginative tales of guardian angels and the girls would drift off to sleep with smiles on their faces feeling safe and protected. Now they fought drifting into the land of Nod because it often led to nightmares. No one understood how hard things were and now it seemed as if the whole neighborhood was against her. Feeling sorry for herself, she poured another drink and cried until she fell into an exhausted sleep.

The shed in Mr. Black's back yard as seen from Sarah's side of the fence.
The shed in Mr. Black's back yard as seen from Sarah's side of the fence.

Brownie's barking woke her up early in the morning and when he wouldn't settle down she got up and looked outside the window. Half a dozen police cars and a news station van were lined up and down the block. Men wearing surgical masks were dressed in what looked like white "space" suits and were carrying a large black bag across Mr. Black's yard and loading it into a police van. She turned on the local news channel and was stunned by what she heard:

"Acting on a validated tip that Neal Black was the last man seen with two of the missing women, police arrested him last night and obtained a search warrant. A gruesome discovery was made in a shed at the back of his yard and at this time at least 2 dead female bodies have been found. Police said that neighbors had noticed a foul odor recently but had attributed it to the large number of stray cats that were being fed by someone else who lived on the block."

Sarah gasped as the full realization of what the odor was hit her. Dead bodies! She'd been living next door to a killer all this time and hadn't had a clue, not even with the rancid odor! Mr. Black was a strange man- a loner who worked the night shift and never "mingled" with any of the neighbors, never even nodded or returned a hello but being antisocial was a far cry from being a murderer. She was shaken to her core and felt queasy just thinking about what the police were finding so close to her own backyard!

She looked out the window again and saw Bill talking to a cop and then he turned and came up her front walk. She could tell by the ashen look on his face that he was as shaken and bemused by this development as she was and opened the door to let him in. "Are you okay?" he asked. "I feel like such a fool for the horrible way I've been treating you."

She shook her head no and was on the verge of tears but choked them back when she heard the girls come running down the stairs. "There's a bunch of cop cars outside, Mommy!"

"I know," she said, opening her arms and gathering her prescious children close to her chest. How could she ever let them out of her sight again knowing things like this could happen right next door?

To her surprise they turned toward Bill and the outspoken twin, Cindy, started grilling him with questions.

"Are you going to yell at Mommy again?"

"Yell?"

"We heard what you said last night. Did you call the cops to take away our pets?"

His face reddened. "No, no...of course not. I came over this morning to apologize to your mother and we've already made up, haven't we Sarah?"

"Uh-huh."

"Then why are the cops outside?"

"Well now, that's a long story and we can discuss it over breakfast if your mom will let me take you all out to IHOP for pancakes." He looked toward Sarah. "Is that okay with you?"

"Can we go Mommy? Please? Pretty please with cherries on top?"

Oh to be so young, innocent and easily distracted. The girls were obviously thrilled with the invitation. Their faces had a sparkle Sarah hadn't seen in a long time and though the last thing she felt like doing was going out for breakfast, she didn't have the heart to say no. "Sounds good. Go brush your teeth and put on sundresses."

"Yeah!" They bounded up the stairs and Sarah gave Bill an appreciative glance. "Thanks."

He nodded but his face looked very solemn. "They'll still have to be told."

"I know but at least now I have a few more minutes to think of what to say."

"I could help you tell them if you want me to. Right now all they need to know is that the police are here to arrest Mr. Brown because they think he's done a bad thing and are taking him to jail. Hopefully, that'll be enough to satisfy their curiosity but if they ask specific questions, I'll answer it for them, okay?"

His offer made her remember how good he always treated the girls even during the recent dispute over the animals, letting them help him tend his garden and setting up sprinklers for them to run through afterwards. "Thanks, I'd appreciate that." She hesitated, then added, "About the cats..."

"Don't worry about them right now, Sarah. I'll talk to the neighbors. I'm sure everyone will feel as badly as I do about the way we were so quick to blame the animals for the smell."

His compassion broke through her defenses when she saw that he was truly contrite and willing to make amends. "Thanks. I would appreciate that. I do have one question that's been bothering me for quite some time but haven't felt comfortable enough to ask you..."

"Just ask, I promise to listen and not fly off the handle or give you a nasty retort. I know I've been acting like a real jerk, too quick to jump to wrong conclusions."

"Yeah, you have, but the thing that hurt the most was when you told me that my having so many animals and pets around was psychologically unhealthy for the girls. My question is, were you insinuating that it makes me a bad mother?"

She was relieved to see that he adamantly shook his head. "Quite the opposite. I was just trying to get you to see that the girls needed the bulk of your attention now that they no longer have their dad. When you were nursing the kittens with droppers every few hours Emily and Cindy had told me they felt jealous of all the attention you were giving to the kitties. They loved the kitties but wanted more time with you."

His words stabbed at her heart but also enlightened her as she realized, for the first time, that she'd been so wrapped up in caring for the animals that she'd gotten out of touch with how her girls were truly feeling and how much they needed her full attention. She swallowed hard and asked another thing that had been bothering her. "Do you think I'm crazy for being so attached to my animals?"

"I've never known anyone more sane. I think you're just trying to survive an extremely painful time of loss."

She felt her face flush, embarassed by all the bad thoughts she'd been having about his lack of compassion. The sound of the twins' excited voices wafting down the stairs interrupted her current thoughts and put her focus back on the girls.

"I'm gonna have a waffle."

"Me too, with blueberries on top."

Bill smiled, "Sounds like they're almost dressed and anxious to get going. I'll be back in 10 minutes to pick you all up."

She smiled back, suddenly self-conscious that she was still in her pajamas. He let himself out the door and after checking on the girls, she went to her bedroom to pick out something to wear. She saw a bright yellow sundress that John had given her last Christmas and reached for it thinking about the half dozen similar dresses that he'd wrapped into a large box along with plane tickets for a winter vacation to Costa Rica. It was supposed to be a second honeymoon and he'd even arranged for his mother to take care of the girls. Sadly, it was a trip that had never happened and until today she'd been too heartbroken to wear any of the dresses.

She wasn't ready for another romantic relationship but her heart felt light enough to put on a bright dress, at least she momentarily thought so until, dress in hand, she looked out the window and caught a glimpse of the men in the white suits taking out another body. A moment of relief that the killer had been found was quickly followed by a disturbing thought- if the killings had indeed been part of a cult it meant there were still others in the community that had aided in this crime.

She put the yellow sundress back and reached for a black skirt and white cotton blouse, two colors that had become like a uniform since John's death. The only thing that was different this morning was that she put some make-up on. The girls came in just as she was blotting her lips.

"You look beautiful, Mommy."

"Thanks, sweethearts, so do you." And it was true. They looked like little angels in their flowered dresses and matching daisy sandals, their own Christmas presents from Daddy who had wanted all his "girls" to be beautiful and happy.

Comments

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Sunnie Day Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Dear Gail,

What a chilling story and sure has happened somewhere in our universe. It does make you want to gather all the ones you love and never let them out of your sight. You did a wonderful job with this story. You are such a talented writer. I really enjoyed it..Kept me sitting on the edge of my seat. Best of luck with the contest.

Take care,

Sunnie

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writer20 Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Great read, I enjoyed it very much now I sitting back on my chair.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Sunnie,

Glad you liked it. I wasn't sure how readers would respond to this story, especially those who usually follow me, as this is very different from my normally upbeat writing so I greatly appreciate your feedback.

This was definitely a work of fiction but, as in most fiction, there is some truth in it. About 15 years ago one of my closest friends (who is now deceased)was a widow who had many cats and dogs including feral cats that frequented her yard because she fed them. She lived on a city street and some neighbors complained that the feral cats were causing an offensive odor (she was meticulous with the care of her indoor animals and she knew the outside animals weren't the cause of the odor but no one believed her). The odor turned out to be coming from a neighbor who lived one door down from her. The man was arrested for the murder of 13 prostitutes and all of the bodies were found in the basement of his house! I heard it on the news before she had a chance to call me and nearly fell off my seat! So you're right, something like this has happened in the universe and it was almost in my dear friend's yard!!!

The rest of my story is a work of my fertile imagination.

Hub Hugs,

Gail

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Writer20,

Glad you enjoyed it and I greatly appreciate you taking time to read it and leave a comment.

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akirchner Level 4 Commenter 6 months ago

Gail - I thought it was extremely well written and captivating....and unfortunately one of those things that seem to happen in our society. Yikes - we are so busy not paying attention when things are going on right under our noses. I just hope Bill wasn't part of the cult!

Voted up!!

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Vinaya Ghimire Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

I had expected that rotten odor came from dead bodies but I had no idea you were intended to alter Sarah's thoughts on living. I enjoyed this story in its entirety.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Audrey,

Thanks so much for your insightful feedback. Yeah, unfortunately things similar to this do happen, sometimes in our own neighborhoods (see comment I made to Sunnie).

It would be truly chilling if Bill turned out to be part of the cult. Have no plans for a sequel at present, though. Wanted to leave this ending as one of life's uncertainties that readers can imagine will be clarified (or perhaps not) at the killer's sensationalized trial.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Vinaya,

I figured there'd be astute readers who would link the odor to the serial killer. Glad you enjoyed the direction I took the story in despite having the odor part figured out. Many neighbors complain about their neighbor's animals and I think there's a lot of prejudice against and stereotyping of people who not only love animals but have alot of them, even if the animals are well cared for. I wanted to bring that fact out in this story and also show that things aren't always what we think they are. A person's property can look immaculate yet evil can dwell inside the house, or the property can look unkempt and a very tender hearted and wounded person can dwell inside the house.

Thanks as always, for all your support.

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brittanytodd Level 6 Commenter 6 months ago

Great story! Voted up and followed. (Just a note, you should legally cite the photos so this work can be entered in the contest. I just had to do that with all of my hubs.) I think you'd have a good chance at winning the contest! Keep up the great work.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Brittanytodd,

Thanks so much for the feedback and vote up. It's greatly appreciated.

I also appreciate the tip about the photos. They are photos I took and I put my hubber and personal name as the source of the photo. I don't believe anything else is needed.

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brittanytodd Level 6 Commenter 6 months ago

Oh good. I didn't know, so I thought it was worth mentioning. I think you have a great chance in the contest. Good luck and thanks for the follow/fan mail.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Brittanytodd,

It was worth the mention and I appreciate your good intentions. Things like that can disqualify an otherwise good submission in the contest.

I'm glad to be your fan and am looking forward to reading more of your stories.

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mary615 Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Hi, Oh One With SO Much Talent! You never cease to amaze me. You're not only a fantastic photographer, but a fantastic writer. This one is a keeper, for sure. I've bookmarked it because I like it so well. Hope you do a sequel.

PS I never got your email. Hope I didn't delete it. Good to see you.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Mary,

Am so glad you enjoyed this and appreciate your ongoing support, comments and feedback.

I resent you a Hub Pages email with the photo info you requested. Check your spam section if you don't see it in your regular email. It will have my hubbername and Gail Sobotkin as sender.

Good luck. Your photos in your Costa Rica hub were amazing!

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mary615 Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Hi HBN, I'll recheck my email. Goodnight...

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Peggy W Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

What a story...and to think that even though this one was fiction, it reminded you of a similar one that truly happened. Scary that we cannot easily tell from outward appearances who the sick and demented souls are in this world. You are a terrific writer. Glad that there are no rotten smells coming from our neighborhood!

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Peggy,

Thanks for your kind words and I'm glad the story held your interest. Glad there are no smells coming from my neighborhood, too! Things like this really do shake one's trust.

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marcoujor Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

OOHH, Gail,

Completely different and it worked just beautifully... reason being that you are an exquisite writer no matter what the genre!

I love when we stretch... it is mental exercise and you are working on advanced aerobics, leaving us in the dust, panting for breath! As for me, I am going to rest quietly this PM and keep reading outstanding work like this... pacing the race and all (LOL)!

Voted UP & UABI... way to go and good luck with this entry, mar.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Oh Mar,

You have such a way of making a person feel so good after reading one of your comments. Thanks so much for all your support and encouragement. Yes, it does feel good to stretch as you have been doing, also.

Thanks for the vote up and good luck on your own entries.

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A.A. Zavala Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Such a chilling story based on true events! I will not allow it to change my plans to visit one day...

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thelyricwriter Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

WOW, WOW, and ??? WOW! What a story HBN. Thang, this is good writing. Congrats on this for sure. I was hooked from the first sentence and I easily pictured everything as I read. I am usually not the reading type, but this came easy for me and it was actually fun. Let me tell you, hands down, you are a fantastic writer HBN. You have some real talent. I have read other stories and you have variety. This was a little creepy. A job well done. I hope you have had a good week HBN. Hope all is well. I just finished 15 days in a roll and I am glad to be off tomorrow. But anyway, such a great story. Always a pleasure my friend, ALWAYS:) Voted up, awesome, and interesting.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi A.A.,

So glad you're "here". I needed a good laugh after writing this chilling story. Glad to know you won't let this affect your plans of making it to the East Coast one day!

Seriously though, thanks so much for your ongoing support and encouragement. It's greatly appreciated!

Hub Hugs,

Gail

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Lyricwriter,

Wow. I so appreciate your wonderful feedback and am honored that you spent prescious time reading and commenting on this story after just coming off a 15 day work schedule. Hope you have a wonderful day off.

Your support and encouragement warm my heart as does your writing. Thanks for the vote up. I appreciate it!

Hub Hugs,

Gail

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Movie Master Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Hi Gail, Wow! It's a terrific story, what an amazing writer you are.

Really enjoyed this and voting up/awesome, best wishes MM

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stayingalivemoma Level 4 Commenter 6 months ago

Voted up and awesome. Couldn't stop reading it. You have a great writing style. It really engages the reader.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Movie Master,

So glad you enjoyed it and I thank you for the vote up and kind words. I really appreciate it.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Stayingalivemoma,

So glad you enjoyed this hub and thanks for the fan mail. I greatly appreciate your feedback.

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Stephanie Henkel Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Ohhh...I really loved the mysterious twist in this one! The fact that you added in a hint of a possible romance made it enticing to the very end. As always, you captured my attention and held me spellbound to the last sentence, and then I still imagined the story going on to a time when Sarah would wear the yellow dress... You are a wonderful writer!

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Stephanie,

Am thrilled that you enjoyed it and that it held your attention to the very end. I did want the reader to get a whiff of romance without overpowering the story itself and rewrote the last segment a number of times trying to achieve that result. Thanks so much for the valuable feedback and your ongoing support.

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Rosemay50 Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

I am late sorry.

Wow what a chilling tale, and to think a similar thing really did happen. I will be watching my neighbours from noe on.

Great writing and a good read had me on the edge of my seat.

Good luck with the contest

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Eiddwen 6 months ago

What a gripping story,certainly kept me on the edge of my seat until the very end.

I am always amazed at the talent that thrives here on HubPages,and you Gail are amongst the top hubbers.

Take care and ahve a wonderful day my friend.

Eiddwen.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Rosemay,

You're welcome any time you get here. I'm running behind on my own reading with all the great submissions going on for the contest but hope to be over to see you soon.

I really appreciate all your support and always look forward to your comments.

Glad you enjoyed this. Your story about the real haunted house that your in-laws lived in was just as chilling.

Hub Hugs,

Gail

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Eiddwen,

So glad you enjoyed it. As you know, it's not my usual upbeat kind of story but I'm glad I went ahead and wrote it as things like this do happen. Although this story is fiction, it was inspired by a dear friend's experience of living one house away from someone who turned out to be a serial killer (see my remark to Sunnie if you want more details).

Thanks for your kind words.

Aka Professor M 6 months ago

@Happyboomernurse: This was one of the best hubs of this genre that I've read in a long time, Happyboomernurse. It had all the key elements for the mystery and suspense enthusiasts, the Psychological insights and the human interaction was well thought out as were your characters as assigned. All in all, I rank this high to anyone who is looking for a story that really delivers from start to finish.

Well done Happyboomernurse, Bravo!

Voted up and Pushed all the buttons that applied.

Regards Mike (Aka Professor M) ;D

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Danette Watt Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Hi Gail

Your story's title really caught my attention and drew me in. It was a good story - you do have a talent for fiction and I wish you luck in the contest.

And hey - you have an author score of 100! Good for you!

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FloraBreenRobison 6 months ago

Congratulations on your win. I live alone humanwise, but anyone who did live with me would have to realize that I have a soulmate relationship with my cat. I must have time alone with just her.

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K9keystrokes Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Gail,

This is really well written! The ups and downs, the possibility of romance, the possibility of death, it was all just so good! Your style and defined flow are remarkable to say the least. A very fun romp on King Street! Voted up and other good stuff! It's a joy to follow your work.

HubHugs~

K9

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Randy Godwin Level 6 Commenter 6 months ago

Enjoyed the tale! Kudos on your win too!

Randy

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marcoujor Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Just wanted to stop back and say there is nothing "rotten" about winning the daily drawing on this amazing entry!

Congratulations, dear Gail... Hugs, mar!

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brittanytodd Level 6 Commenter 6 months ago

Yay! Congrats on winning the daily contest! Keep up the great work!

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Vinaya Ghimire Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Congratulations! It feels good to see the story, I enjoyed reading, favored by the judges.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Professor M,

Thank you so much for the excellent critque and kind, supportive words about my writing. I so appreciate the specific input and the vote up and am thrilled that you enjoyed the story.

Best Regards,

Gail

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Danette,

My goodness, this must be my lucky day! Just learned this won the daily drawing so thank you for your good luck- it apparently did the trick! (smile)

Seriously though, I really appreciate the feedback as I admire your editorial and writing skills so much.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi FloraBreenRobison,

Thank you for the congrats.

Your soulmate relationship with, and love for, your beautiful cat shines through in the hubs and photos that you've posted on HP and it would only be natural and right for you to continue that strong bond even if you lived with another human. Yes, the human would most definitely need to be someone who could share your affections. Fortunately, there are many out there who do love cats. In the meantime, it's wonderful that you have such a special love in your life.

Thanks for taking time to read my story.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi K9,

"A very fun romp on King Street," I love how you put that! This story was dark like your "The Candle Light Murders," but I'm glad you found it an entertaining read and appreciate the critique and vote up. With so many good entries from our fellow hubbers the contest has made this a fun month.

Am thrilled to be one of your followers.

Hub Hugs,

Gail

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Randy Godwin,

Am so glad you enjoyed the tale and appreciate the kudos on this hub winning the daily draw.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Dear Mar,

You are so wonderfully observant and supportive. Thanks for stopping back with your witty congrats. They're greatly appreciated as are you.

I was thinking of your HP profile pic when I wrote Sarah's loving bond with her prescious dog, Brownie. Every time I see your pic it makes me feel good because one can feel the love of all creatures, human and animal, oozing out of you.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome back Brittany Todd,

I really appreciate the congrats and your support.

Hope you also have good luck in the contest.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome back Vinaya,

Thanks so much for your congratulations which are greatly appreciated. The daily drawing is random so we all have an equal chance of winning but of course it's fun to win. Keep making your wonderful entries knowing that there's a chance of winning every day and a second chance of winning when the judges make their final decisions.

Hub Hugs,

Gail

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Ania L Level 4 Commenter 6 months ago

Really engaging story, well written as well! Thank you very much! Thumbs up!

Now... talking about the pancakes, I feel hungry :)

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Ania,

So glad you liked the story and thanks for the thumbs up and for making me smile when I read your comment about the pancakes. IHOP does make delicious ones although plain waffles are my favorite breakfast item on their menu.

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femmeflashpoint Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Boomer,

It's alllwayyyys the night-shift workers who get blamed for these things. I'm feeling stereotyped! (Grin!)

This is a great story! And, even better that I read it at at 0300, right after coming in from the back patio under the remnants of a full moon, lol.

You get a shiny gold star for the superb hookie-spookie content, and ANOTHER for blending it with such an accurate concept of a young widow struggling with grief and the hurdles she's contending with.

Bill can apologize all he wants for being a horse's rear-end, but I'm still mad at him and the rest of the neighborhood. Shame on them!

And, the remaining question in my head is, the night-shift neighbor? Was he loving the girls to death independently? Or was he part of a cult who intends to keep up the killing?

I smell a sequel on King Street ...

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Movie Master Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Congratulations Gail on your win, well deserved!

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Femmeflashpoint,

What a fascinating comment. Didn't know you were a night-shift worker. I'm a night-owl if I get a daytime nap, but I always hated working the night shift. Staying awake between 3 to 5 AM was torture!

Yeah, I really thought it was horrible that Bill and the rest of the neighborhood ganged up on Sarah, especially since she was so obviously hurting.

I don't have any plans for a sequel but did leave room for conjecture just in case the mood strikes me to go forward with this story. Several possibilities have been rumbling in my head but not enough to run with yet.

Thanks, as always, for your support, encouragement and detailed comment that adds to the hub.

Sending Hub Hugs,

Gail

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Back MM,

Thanks for taking time to return with congratulations. That was so sweet of you and I appreciated the support.

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Sunnie Day Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

OH my goodness...now that makes this story even more chilling..too close for comfort for sure..I know what you mean about writing outside the box..but it is good to stretch our wings and try new things..I think you did a wonderful job.

Have a blessed day,

Sunnie

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marcoujor Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Dear Gail,

A big ditto about the night shift sleepies during the "witching hour" (same time... when 'most' of the patients are finally asleep) and a big hats off to those who work 11-7 shift. You are heroes to me.

I am so teary at your thinking behind Brownie. I swear my mind turned right to Aunt Baby when I read it. You are so amazingly intuitive and beautiful... oh sorry, you're a nurse, you cannot fool us with shaking up your writing style! Love, Maria

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Again Sunnie,

It did feel good to write this story. I had wanted to write a fictional story about a serial killer living next door years ago but couldn't distance myself from my friend's actual experience to do so. Pure reality kept entering my head, but now I was finally able to create a work of real fiction with totally imagined characters and outcomes.

Thanks for your support.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Mar,

Aw...that was such a sweet comment. Funny how our nursing backgrounds and the intuition that gets heightened by nursing experiences and our connections to our patients does find its way into most everything we do. Thanks again for your support and kind words.

Sending Hub Love,

Gail

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qlcoach Level 4 Commenter 6 months ago

Your writing rocks! How's your book coming along? (smile)

Thanks again for stopping over with your comments on my hub, "How to Overcome Worry." Sending you blue and purple Light today. Namasate.....Gary.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Gary,

Ah..you brought a smile to my face this morning. Thank you. I appreciate the blue and purple Light you've sent to me today.

Namasate,

Gail

Aka Professor M 6 months ago

@Happyboomernurse: Congratulations Gail, In my opinion this piece definitely deserved the award, as You have taken this site to a new level of quality in entertaining literary pieces. Very well done!

Regards Mike (Aka Professor M!) ;D

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Purple Perl Level 2 Commenter 6 months ago

Congrats on your well deserved win! Voted you up!

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Mike,

Thanks so much for the congratulations and your kind words. They're very much appreciated.

Best Regards,

Gail

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Purple Perl,

Thanks so much for the congratulations and vote up. They're very much appreciated.

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Melovy Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Hi happyboomernurse,

I just saw that you’ve won another daily draw. Congratulations.

I read this a few days ago but didn’t have time to comment. I was intrigued to see it’s based on something that happened. I liked the way you showed how easy it is to jump to conclusions and be totally wrong - though I did jump to the conclusion that it was Mr Black and was totally right. (Maybe I should be a detective instead of a writer - not!)

And now it’s back to work as I am taking part in Nanowrimo - the plan being to spur myself on to get my second novel finished; it’s going well,and an illuminating process, but after devoting the first week to the HP contest I’m way behind!

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Sunnie Day Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

Whoo hoo!!!!....So happy for you Gail!!!!..This was such a great story and a well deserved honor..Congrats my friend..

Love,

Sunnie

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Melovy,

Yes, I've been twice blessed in this contest and thank you for your congratulations. I was thrilled that you were also a daily drawing winner.

I had no idea you were doing the Nanowritmo in addition to the excellent entries that you've made to the HP Contest but am glad that your creative juices are flowing so freely. I've really enjoyed the short stories that you've rewritten and look forward to reading more, and hopefully one day reading the novel that you're currently working on.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Sunnie,

Thanks for the congratulations and support. It's greatly appreciated.

I just read the interview that Hyphenbird did with you in yesterday's Hub Weekly Newsletter and loved it. I recommended it on the Status Update and even managed to put the correct link in! (smile). For those who missed it and are reading this they can catch it at: http://hubpages.com/about/interview/Sunnie+Day

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Melovy Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Hi Gail, it took me 12 years to finish the first novel, so I wouldn’t hold your breath for this one! (is that a British saying?) Having said that, it is coming along a lot faster, at least in the first draft. I might put up another story soon. I had been planning to post 2 poems but I’ve lost them, both on paper and in cyber space.

And now back to London in 1982…

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Melovy,

For some reason, it never really "clicked" inside my brain that your first book is not only available for purchase but is available in Kindle version. I just purchased "Drawings In Sand" for my Kindle. I love stories and novels that deal with transformation and look forward to reading it.

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Melovy Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Thank you, thank you, thank you!! You’ve just made my day, and I will be truly very interested to hear your feedback.

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Melovy,

No reason for thanks. I'm the one who's excited. I've been so focused on reading your hubs that I hadn't taken time to read your full HP profile page which had all the information I needed to order "Drawings in the Sand."

Will definitely send you a private email when I finish it.

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Alastar Packer Level 8 Commenter 6 months ago

You had me guessing to the end. Very good and I like the way you left things open- is he or isn't he? Belated congrats Gail!

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Alastar,

Thanks for the feedback and for taking time out of your busy schedule to leave a comment.

I was happy this hub won a daily draw and appreciate the congrats. There have been so many great stories entered in the contest and it's been fun reading as many as I can.

Hope you have a great Thanksgiving.

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glassvisage Level 5 Commenter 6 months ago

How a short story should be :) Thanks!

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Welcome Glassvisage,

I appreciate your taking time to leave such a lovely comment and thank you for stopping by.

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Danette Watt Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago

Congratulations on another win!

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 6 months ago

Hi Danette,

Thanks for stopping by again with congratulations. It was a pleasant surprise getting another random win!

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Sharyn's Slant Level 7 Commenter 5 months ago

Very cool story HBN. Congratulations on the win too! Very well deserved. And wow, so many great comments too. Great job!

Sharyn

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Happyboomernurse Hub Author 5 months ago

Hi Sharyn,

Am so glad you enjoyed the story and appreciate the congrats on the daily draw win. It's been interesting to me to read people's comments because the subject matter in this story was quite different from what I usually write.

Thanks so much for your ongoing support. It's greatly appreciated.

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